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Hey, don't tell twiffer, but I liked it better the first way.
the stanzas are so short and concise, they read almost like comic panels (which I see as part of the charm). In that context, exaggerated sound effects seem so very appropriate.
K (oh, and if I was a wise-ass below, I'm so sorry. Leopards, spots, something something.)
no! you weren't a wiseass! or if you were, you were a cute one ...
no, i LIKED the comment.
i haven't decided which way i like this one better. probably it's a good thing i'm not trying to make a living at this poetry stuff.
Making a living at writing, what an idea. I found that trying however inexpertly to get paid caused it to lost all of the mental health benefits (catharsis, pick your meaning) pretty quickly.
On the other hand, you could say I make a living writing proposals.
K
P.S. responded earlier and evidently it was eaten.
hi, august!
sure, link to your heart's content, but i make no promises about the quantity or the quality of the writing.
i appreciate your asking first, before linking. i don't mind your linking this one, but if you should accidentally stumble over any of my other writing blogs, well, they're still under wraps and i'd like to try to keep them that way for now.
i see you keifus!
any way, my suggestion is based on the belief that poetry is still primarily an aural form. so playing around with the format on the page, unless mastered (only cummings and williams come to mind) is generally best avoided. but that's just me.
granted, one cannot master it unless one experiments...ah, the blessed catch-22.
hi, twif!
i'm a fan of 'poetry that sounds good' too, but have been convinced by my poet friends to branch out and dabble in more visual forms.
besides, who's to say that we the poets shouldn't structure our poems to clue the reader in on how they're supposed to read our work out loud? like composers adding pianissimo and allegro and so forth.
;-)
oh, i know. just my own quirks is all.
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